User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Passed over message

Thu May 15, 2008 10:07 pm

Image

Just two minor things ...

In the first line, wouldn't "who" is feeling passed over be better? He's a man, not a thing.

In the last line, shouldn't it read "who has more than 4 seniority points less than ..."? Presently, the sentence doesn't seem to make much sense. :innocent:
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]
Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)
[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]
American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Gray_Lensman
Posts: 497
Joined: Mon Jun 18, 2007 4:04 am
Location: Who is John Galt?

Thu May 15, 2008 10:22 pm

deleted

Brochgale
Brigadier General
Posts: 474
Joined: Sat Oct 27, 2007 12:22 am
Location: Scotland
Contact: Yahoo Messenger

Thu May 15, 2008 10:50 pm

Gray_Lensman wrote:Quite cool to post these descrepancies, but give the programmer/developers some slack. English is not their first language.


Out of curiosity what is thier first langauge or are they multi-lingual - Cobol, C++ Etc. They should get out more?
"How noble is one, to love his country:how sad the fate to mingle with those you hate"
W.A.Fletcher "Memoirs Of A Confederate Soldier"

User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Fri May 16, 2008 12:01 am

Gray_Lensman wrote:Quite cool to post these descrepancies, but give the programmer/developers some slack. English is not their first language.


Nor mine. Just trying to suggest improvements. :innocent:
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]

Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)

[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]

American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Gray_Lensman
Posts: 497
Joined: Mon Jun 18, 2007 4:04 am
Location: Who is John Galt?

Fri May 16, 2008 3:03 am

deleted

User avatar
Pocus
Posts: 25673
Joined: Wed Oct 19, 2005 7:37 am
Location: Lyon (France)

Fri May 16, 2008 6:53 am

It's ok, we do not mind on the contrary to improve the texts of the game.

They have been reread several time by native speakers though, but I guess that, with the amount of text to proofread, some discrepancies can slip through.

The last sentence makes perfect sense for me, what's wrong? As it says, to be passed over you check who is the general with the highest seniority, then you add 4.
Image


Hofstadter's Law: "It always takes longer than you expect, even when you take into account Hofstadter's law."

User avatar
Primasprit
Posts: 1614
Joined: Mon Jun 19, 2006 7:44 pm
Location: Germany

Fri May 16, 2008 7:46 am

Heldenkaiser wrote:[...]In the last line, shouldn't it read "who has more than 4 seniority points less than ..."? Presently, the sentence doesn't seem to make much sense. :innocent:

"more" is OK, as low numbers mean high seniority. :cwboy:

User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Fri May 16, 2008 1:42 pm

Primasprit wrote:"more" is OK, as low numbers mean high seniority. :cwboy:


I see! But then it should read "who has more than 4 seniority points more than". :innocent:

(The first "more" means it can be 4, or more than 4; the second is the direct comparison, "more than" the other guy. So it's a necessary repetition.)
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]

Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)

[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]

American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Fri May 16, 2008 1:55 pm

Or to avoid the repetition of "more than", it could read "who has at least 4 seniority points more than". :)
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]

Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)

[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]

American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Pocus
Posts: 25673
Joined: Wed Oct 19, 2005 7:37 am
Location: Lyon (France)

Fri May 16, 2008 2:22 pm

That's not that, I would say

"You pass over a leader if you promote a leader who has at least 4 seniority points less than the most senior commander of a given rank."

ie the most senior has a seniority rank of 3, you pass over him if you promote someone with 7 or more.

By the way you missed 'loose' which should be 'lose' :)
Image


Hofstadter's Law: "It always takes longer than you expect, even when you take into account Hofstadter's law."

User avatar
Primasprit
Posts: 1614
Joined: Mon Jun 19, 2006 7:44 pm
Location: Germany

Fri May 16, 2008 2:58 pm

Congratulations, now I am confused. :8o:

If he has 4 seniority points less, he has the higher rank regarding seniority, hasn't he? :cwboy:

User avatar
Pocus
Posts: 25673
Joined: Wed Oct 19, 2005 7:37 am
Location: Lyon (France)

Fri May 16, 2008 3:03 pm

hum yes, forget... where is the nurse, I feel bad now :bonk:
Image


Hofstadter's Law: "It always takes longer than you expect, even when you take into account Hofstadter's law."

User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Fri May 16, 2008 3:05 pm

Pocus wrote:That's not that, I would say

"You pass over a leader if you promote a leader who has at least 4 seniority points less than the most senior commander of a given rank."


That's what I thought, but as Primasprit says, the system works downwards, i.e. a higher number is less seniority. :)

But since most people will think of a lower seniority (as you did) when we say "less" points, maybe let's say "lower" instead, which is unambiguous.

So how about "You pass over a leader if you promote a leader whose seniority is at least 4 points lower than that of the most senior commander of that rank."?
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]

Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)

[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]

American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Heldenkaiser
AGEod Grognard
Posts: 943
Joined: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:32 pm
Contact: Website

Fri May 16, 2008 3:16 pm

Wait, I really think I got it now. :)

"You pass over the most senior commander of a given rank if his seniority is at least four points better than the one of the commander you promote. (A lower number is better.)"
[color="Gray"]"These Savages may indeed be a formidable Enemy to your raw American Militia, but, upon the King's regular & disciplined Troops, Sir, it is impossible they should make any Impression." -- General Edward Braddock[/color]

Colonial Campaigns Club (supports BoA and WiA)

[color="Gray"]"... and keep moving on." -- General U.S. Grant[/color]

American Civil War Game Club (supports AACW)

User avatar
Primasprit
Posts: 1614
Joined: Mon Jun 19, 2006 7:44 pm
Location: Germany

Fri May 16, 2008 3:29 pm

Sounds good. You have my vote to become the official Ageod tooltip text author. :nuts: :p

Cheers
Norbert

Return to “Help to improve AACW!”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests