Passed over message

[Heldenkaiser]

Just two minor things ...

In the first line, wouldn't "who" is feeling passed over be better? He's a man, not a thing.

In the last line, shouldn't it read "who has more than 4 seniority points less than ..."? Presently, the sentence doesn't seem to make much sense.

[Gray_Lensman]

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[Brochgale]

Quite cool to post these descrepancies, but give the programmer/developers some slack. English is not their first language.

Out of curiosity what is thier first langauge or are they multi-lingual - Cobol, C++ Etc. They should get out more?

[Heldenkaiser]

Quite cool to post these descrepancies, but give the programmer/developers some slack. English is not their first language.

Nor mine. Just trying to suggest improvements.

[Gray_Lensman]

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[Pocus]

It's ok, we do not mind on the contrary to improve the texts of the game.

They have been reread several time by native speakers though, but I guess that, with the amount of text to proofread, some discrepancies can slip through.

The last sentence makes perfect sense for me, what's wrong? As it says, to be passed over you check who is the general with the highest seniority, then you add 4.

[Primasprit]

[...]In the last line, shouldn't it read "who has more than 4 seniority points less than ..."? Presently, the sentence doesn't seem to make much sense.

"more" is OK, as low numbers mean high seniority.

[Heldenkaiser]

"more" is OK, as low numbers mean high seniority.

I see! But then it should read "who has more than 4 seniority points more than".

(The first "more" means it can be 4, or more than 4; the second is the direct comparison, "more than" the other guy. So it's a necessary repetition.)

[Heldenkaiser]

Or to avoid the repetition of "more than", it could read "who has at least 4 seniority points more than".

[Pocus]

That's not that, I would say

"You pass over a leader if you promote a leader who has at least 4 seniority points less than the most senior commander of a given rank."

ie the most senior has a seniority rank of 3, you pass over him if you promote someone with 7 or more.

By the way you missed 'loose' which should be 'lose'

[Primasprit]

Congratulations, now I am confused.

If he has 4 seniority points less, he has the higher rank regarding seniority, hasn't he?

[Pocus]

hum yes, forget... where is the nurse, I feel bad now

[Heldenkaiser]

That's not that, I would say

"You pass over a leader if you promote a leader who has at least 4 seniority points less than the most senior commander of a given rank."

That's what I thought, but as Primasprit says, the system works downwards, i.e. a higher number is less seniority.

But since most people will think of a lower seniority (as you did) when we say "less" points, maybe let's say "lower" instead, which is unambiguous.

So how about "You pass over a leader if you promote a leader whose seniority is at least 4 points lower than that of the most senior commander of that rank."?

[Heldenkaiser]

Wait, I really think I got it now.

"You pass over the most senior commander of a given rank if his seniority is at least four points better than the one of the commander you promote. (A lower number is better.)"

[Primasprit]

Sounds good. You have my vote to become the official Ageod tooltip text author.

Cheers
Norbert